Griffon Grammar Feedback

[David]

A thread to point out errors in the nature of typos or awkward sentence structure here.

[Tentomon4]

So should I be worried about the lack of posts here or has feedback been posted elsewhere?

Anyway, I want to nitpick that Larry Dixon and Mercedes Lackey essay(or whatever one calls it) feel more like a foreword, then a start of a chapter.
While being a great tone setter it really has nothing to do with the rest of the chapter.

[David]

It is a foreword.

[Tentomon4]

Good.

[Avorin]

I found an error in the main griffon entry under low light vision it mentions hippogriffs not griffons.


Edit: noticed something else odd if this part is right "Ponykind: Griff ons qualify as ponykind for all eff ects,
feats, and archetypes, to be used by or against the griffon." then why does the hippogriff need this line "Ponykind: Hippogriffs qualify as ponykind for all effects, feats, and archetypes, to be used by or against the hippogriff.

Griffon: Hippogriff s qualify as griffon for all eff ects, feats, and archetypes,
to be used by or against the hippogriff." That would seem redundant then.

[David]

Hippogriffs count as both ponykind and griffon for things that care about one or the other. That is intentional. I fixed the other one though, good catch!

[Avorin]

Well you see that first part was in the griffon box saying they count as ponykind though so that's why I was thinking it was off

[David]

You were correct. I fixed this. Thanks for pointing it out!

[chimeforest]

On page 17, under favored class options, Druid and Summoner should be in bold.

On a side note, the alternative racial traits on the same page are not in the griffon herolab extension (That's part of how I came to notice the above error)

[David]

Foul thread necromancy! But good to know.