Post by Llisandur » Fri Jul 08, 2016 1:16 pm
I'll say up here in case I missed any below. Ability score names should be capitalized. Feat names should have each word capitalized. Skill names should have each word capitalized, except words in parenthesis for the Craft, Knowledge, Perform and Profession skills. Spell names should be lower case, except for Roman numerals, and italicized. Class names should be lower case. Class or racial traits/features should be lower case. Weapons should be lower case. As always, sentence structure takes precedence and labels have every word capitalized.
Page 3: There's a blank page after the Table of Contents. All page numbers on table of contents need to be increased by 1.
Page 5: Under special abilities, Earth-Bound should be bolded and needs a colon after it.
Page 15: Moon's Blessing needs better description to indicate choices.
Page 16: Combat the Night and Control the Night need to indicate that they are choices of Moon's Blessing.
Page 17: In the benefit line of Fur of Force, both words of the Self Enhancement feat name need to be capitalized.
Page 26: In the benefit line of Weather Control, Cloud Walker should be lower case. In the last sentence, "If a second effect is performed while one is going..." replace "going" with "active".
Page 27: In the description of Alliance of Wind, 6th line, "spells DC" should be "spell's DC"
Page 35: In the second line of Striped, under Zebra Unification, "three times a day may use" should be "three times a day you may use"
Page 39: Under Kindness of Strangers, there's a double period in "perception check vs. your" on the 6th line.
Page 42: In the benefit line of Partial Change, there's a space before the period after "levels".
Page 43: In the description of Enhance Doppelganger, 5th line, both words of the Beastial Growth feat name should be capitalized.
Page 43: In the ponykind table for Wave of Change, Sea Horse is cut off to just "Sea"
Page 44: Under Leatherwing, in the Base Stats line, -2 Dex should be -2 Cha.
Page 47: In the benefit line of Bloody Magic, 2nd line, "they" after the open parenthesis shouldn't be capitalized.
Page 47: In the benefit line of Dark Tenacity, 3rd line, "you may chose" should be "you may choose".
Page 48: In the benefit line of Sharp Turns, 5th line, Skill Focus (Fly) should be capitalized, both feat name and skill name.
Page 49: In the description of Shadow Dodge, 2nd line, "Allows" should be lower case.
Page 49: In the level lines for Moment of Darkness, "Ranger 0" Should be "Ranger 1". Rangers do not have 0-level spells.
Page 51: Under special abilities, Language of the Dead, 3rd line, "known to dead" should be "known to the dead".
Page 55: In the prerequisite line of Rotting Companion, "Knowledge Religion" should be Knowledge "(religion)".
Page 55: In the benefit line of Spiritual Awakening, 4th line, "but not a feat(You" should be replaces with "but not a feat (you".
Page 55: Prerequisite and Benefit under Final Prayer should be bolded. In the prerequisite line, "Knowledge religion" should be "Knowledge (religion)".
Page 64: In the benefit line of Space and Time Comprehension, 2nd line, "conjuration(teleport)" should have a space between "conjuration" and "(teleport)". In the 5th line, "DC 15 knowledge (planes) check", Knowledge should be capitalized.
Page 64: Under the Prey oracle curse, 3rd bullet point, 3rd line, "before the effect lands" should be "before an effect lands," for clarity. Include the comma.
Page 66: Move the info box below Special Abilities to match other race entries.
Page 66: Adjust Trait presentation to match other races.
Page 68: In the benefit line of As Fate Demands It, 4th line, the comma should be a semicolon.
Page 71: Replace "Being an Antean trades away the Earth-Bound racial trait. "Being an Antean replaces the Unique Destiny trait."
Page 71: Separate the paladin archetype from the traits.
Page 73: In the benefit line of Crushing Terror, 2nd line, Intimidate should be capitalized.
Page 74: In the benefit line of So Others May Live, 1st line, AoO should be "attack of opportunity".
Page 74: In the benefit line of Restrict Magic 1st line, "Once per day, As an immediate action," should be "Once per day, as an immediate action,".
Page 74: In the benefit line of You're Safe With Me, 3rd line, "I Will Protect you" should be all capitalized. In the special line, 1st line, AoO should be "attack of opportunity".
Page 75: In the benefit line of Some Like It Big, all skill names should be capitalized.
Page 75: In the description of Spread Your Hooves, replace "You're reach" with "You reach".
Page 76: In the description of Apathetic Haze in the Apathy subdomain, add "You can use this ability 3 + you Wisdom modifier times per day." after the last line.
Page 77: Move the info box below Special Abilities to match other race entries.
Page 81: In the description of Bright Shield, 4th line, "that target’s touch AC" should be "that targets touch AC".
Page 81: In the description of Consolidated Wealth, 2nd line, "equal value in gem" should be "equal value in gems".
Page 81: In the description of Lead by Example, 4th line, "spiritual weapon)gives a" should be "spiritual weapon) gives a".
Page 81: In the description of Slave to Destiny, the last line is missing a period after the parenthesis.
Page 86: The Special line under Full Integrations should be bolded.
Page 86: In the benefit line of Stable Effort, 2nd line, "average roll(As if you rolled" should be "average roll (as if you rolled".
Page 93: In the prerequisite line of Perilous Balance, replace Deep Visions with Remember the Depths.
Page 94: Prerequisite and Benefit under Shared Breath should be bolded.
Page 94: Prerequisite and Benefit under Shout of the Sea should be bolded.
Page 96: Move the info box below Special Abilities to match other race entries.
Page 96: under special abilities, fire resistance should be lower case, skill names should be capitalized.
Page 96: Flaming Inquisition should have subsection title background.
Page 96: In the description of Burning Hoof, 4th line, "Burst., if it has" should be replaced with "Burst. If it has".
Page 99: In the description of Sandy Escape, it needs a period at the end.
Page 99: In the benefit line of Well-honed Suspicion, skill names should be capitalized.
Page 99: The table at the end of the second column likely belongs to In Alcohol, Clarity from the previous page.
Page 101: Lots of incorrect capitalizations on this page. See the notes at the top.
Page 101: In the bonus spells for Arid Mystery, 4th level spell, the proper spell name is Groundswell.
Page 101: Replace the description of Well-Trained Wanderer with "Gain proficiency in the khopesh and the falcata. Gain desert favored terrain as a ranger of two levels lower than your oracle level."
Page 101: Replace the description of Caravan Keeper with "Increase the threat range of the khopesh and the falcata by 1. You must be at least 3rd level to select this revelation. Requires Well-Trained Wanderer revelation."
Page 101: In the description of Call Forth the Storm, 2nd line, replace the comma after "you have" with a semicolon.
Page 101: In the description of Wary Beyond Measure, replace "tremmorsense" with "tremorsense".
Page 106: In the benefit line of Cry of Pain, 2nd line, replace "an perished" with "a perished".
Page 107: In the description of Love Finds a Way, 2nd line, capitalize Diplomacy skill name.
Page 107: In the description of Beloved of the Gods, 2nd line, remove an extraneous "the" in "when revived from the death".
Page 108: In the description of Passionate Lash, 4th line, add a comma after "whip".
I'll say up here in case I missed any below. Ability score names should be capitalized. Feat names should have each word capitalized. Skill names should have each word capitalized, except words in parenthesis for the Craft, Knowledge, Perform and Profession skills. Spell names should be lower case, except for Roman numerals, and italicized. Class names should be lower case. Class or racial traits/features should be lower case. Weapons should be lower case. As always, sentence structure takes precedence and labels have every word capitalized.
Page 3: There's a blank page after the Table of Contents. All page numbers on table of contents need to be increased by 1.
Page 5: Under special abilities, Earth-Bound should be bolded and needs a colon after it.
Page 15: Moon's Blessing needs better description to indicate choices.
Page 16: Combat the Night and Control the Night need to indicate that they are choices of Moon's Blessing.
Page 17: In the benefit line of Fur of Force, both words of the Self Enhancement feat name need to be capitalized.
Page 26: In the benefit line of Weather Control, Cloud Walker should be lower case. In the last sentence, "If a second effect is performed while one is going..." replace "going" with "active".
Page 27: In the description of Alliance of Wind, 6th line, "spells DC" should be "spell's DC"
Page 35: In the second line of Striped, under Zebra Unification, "three times a day may use" should be "three times a day you may use"
Page 39: Under Kindness of Strangers, there's a double period in "perception check vs. your" on the 6th line.
Page 42: In the benefit line of Partial Change, there's a space before the period after "levels".
Page 43: In the description of Enhance Doppelganger, 5th line, both words of the Beastial Growth feat name should be capitalized.
Page 43: In the ponykind table for Wave of Change, Sea Horse is cut off to just "Sea"
Page 44: Under Leatherwing, in the Base Stats line, -2 Dex should be -2 Cha.
Page 47: In the benefit line of Bloody Magic, 2nd line, "they" after the open parenthesis shouldn't be capitalized.
Page 47: In the benefit line of Dark Tenacity, 3rd line, "you may chose" should be "you may choose".
Page 48: In the benefit line of Sharp Turns, 5th line, Skill Focus (Fly) should be capitalized, both feat name and skill name.
Page 49: In the description of Shadow Dodge, 2nd line, "Allows" should be lower case.
Page 49: In the level lines for Moment of Darkness, "Ranger 0" Should be "Ranger 1". Rangers do not have 0-level spells.
Page 51: Under special abilities, Language of the Dead, 3rd line, "known to dead" should be "known to the dead".
Page 55: In the prerequisite line of Rotting Companion, "Knowledge Religion" should be Knowledge "(religion)".
Page 55: In the benefit line of Spiritual Awakening, 4th line, "but not a feat(You" should be replaces with "but not a feat (you".
Page 55: Prerequisite and Benefit under Final Prayer should be bolded. In the prerequisite line, "Knowledge religion" should be "Knowledge (religion)".
Page 64: In the benefit line of Space and Time Comprehension, 2nd line, "conjuration(teleport)" should have a space between "conjuration" and "(teleport)". In the 5th line, "DC 15 knowledge (planes) check", Knowledge should be capitalized.
Page 64: Under the Prey oracle curse, 3rd bullet point, 3rd line, "before the effect lands" should be "before an effect lands," for clarity. Include the comma.
Page 66: Move the info box below Special Abilities to match other race entries.
Page 66: Adjust Trait presentation to match other races.
Page 68: In the benefit line of As Fate Demands It, 4th line, the comma should be a semicolon.
Page 71: Replace "Being an Antean trades away the Earth-Bound racial trait. "Being an Antean replaces the Unique Destiny trait."
Page 71: Separate the paladin archetype from the traits.
Page 73: In the benefit line of Crushing Terror, 2nd line, Intimidate should be capitalized.
Page 74: In the benefit line of So Others May Live, 1st line, AoO should be "attack of opportunity".
Page 74: In the benefit line of Restrict Magic 1st line, "Once per day, As an immediate action," should be "Once per day, as an immediate action,".
Page 74: In the benefit line of You're Safe With Me, 3rd line, "I Will Protect you" should be all capitalized. In the special line, 1st line, AoO should be "attack of opportunity".
Page 75: In the benefit line of Some Like It Big, all skill names should be capitalized.
Page 75: In the description of Spread Your Hooves, replace "You're reach" with "You reach".
Page 76: In the description of Apathetic Haze in the Apathy subdomain, add "You can use this ability 3 + you Wisdom modifier times per day." after the last line.
Page 77: Move the info box below Special Abilities to match other race entries.
Page 81: In the description of Bright Shield, 4th line, "that target’s touch AC" should be "that targets touch AC".
Page 81: In the description of Consolidated Wealth, 2nd line, "equal value in gem" should be "equal value in gems".
Page 81: In the description of Lead by Example, 4th line, "spiritual weapon)gives a" should be "spiritual weapon) gives a".
Page 81: In the description of Slave to Destiny, the last line is missing a period after the parenthesis.
Page 86: The Special line under Full Integrations should be bolded.
Page 86: In the benefit line of Stable Effort, 2nd line, "average roll(As if you rolled" should be "average roll (as if you rolled".
Page 93: In the prerequisite line of Perilous Balance, replace Deep Visions with Remember the Depths.
Page 94: Prerequisite and Benefit under Shared Breath should be bolded.
Page 94: Prerequisite and Benefit under Shout of the Sea should be bolded.
Page 96: Move the info box below Special Abilities to match other race entries.
Page 96: under special abilities, fire resistance should be lower case, skill names should be capitalized.
Page 96: Flaming Inquisition should have subsection title background.
Page 96: In the description of Burning Hoof, 4th line, "Burst., if it has" should be replaced with "Burst. If it has".
Page 99: In the description of Sandy Escape, it needs a period at the end.
Page 99: In the benefit line of Well-honed Suspicion, skill names should be capitalized.
Page 99: The table at the end of the second column likely belongs to In Alcohol, Clarity from the previous page.
Page 101: Lots of incorrect capitalizations on this page. See the notes at the top.
Page 101: In the bonus spells for Arid Mystery, 4th level spell, the proper spell name is Groundswell.
Page 101: Replace the description of Well-Trained Wanderer with "Gain proficiency in the khopesh and the falcata. Gain desert favored terrain as a ranger of two levels lower than your oracle level."
Page 101: Replace the description of Caravan Keeper with "Increase the threat range of the khopesh and the falcata by 1. You must be at least 3rd level to select this revelation. Requires Well-Trained Wanderer revelation."
Page 101: In the description of Call Forth the Storm, 2nd line, replace the comma after "you have" with a semicolon.
Page 101: In the description of Wary Beyond Measure, replace "tremmorsense" with "tremorsense".
Page 106: In the benefit line of Cry of Pain, 2nd line, replace "an perished" with "a perished".
Page 107: In the description of Love Finds a Way, 2nd line, capitalize Diplomacy skill name.
Page 107: In the description of Beloved of the Gods, 2nd line, remove an extraneous "the" in "when revived from the death".
Page 108: In the description of Passionate Lash, 4th line, add a comma after "whip".